Just Do It: False Starts, Late Deaths, and Appearances
by John Robert Marlow
PUSSYFOOTING AROUND
There are several things wrong with this sentence: “Frank was visibly upset when he started to cross what appeared to be a street.” Strictly speaking, there may be nothing grammatically incorrect here. Stylistically, though, it’s a train wreck—and would be even if Frank hadn’t died fifty pages back. Simply put, the sentence pussyfoots around, wasting time and space. This post will help you to avoid doing the same…
